VOTE! - BGOL Halloween Horror Writing Contest 2!

[Echelon]

Party of the Year
It's a shame more of the fam didn't find interest in this contest. This story is very relevant to the prevailing tone of the board in general. Who among us hasn't had to deal with their libido getting the into hot water. In poor Kevin's case, it cost him his life.

I tend to write dialogue driven short stories, and this one appealed that nature in me. I liked the exchanges as again, they were very relevant to the themes we usually encounter most here at BGOL. It was exciting watching Kevin fall ever deeper into Jenny's trap and his end, while expected, was executed in a shocking and visceral manner. I liked this story, and I'm sure it would have the most mass appeal within our community.


Sweet Streams
I was immediately impressed by the strength and weight of the narrative. I was reminded of the noir crime genre styles popularized in the early half of the 20th century. It was immediately obvious how completely devoid of passion this man's life had become. He'd grown technical and analytical, finding his purpose in the hunt. I wish I'd taken more of this tone in my Ark Knight story from one of the previous contests. This narrative styling is simply more conducive to conveying the bleak and bloody reality that a man who lives only to fight must endure.

There are so many levels of ideas that beg to be expounded upon in this story. The "classic" narrative, the vampire epidemic, the technological achievement, the lost love story; this would be a very long but very satisfying moving. It could be beautiful if done with the focus and care given to Blade Runner or other sci fi epics from decades past.


American Werewolf in Illinois
I had fun experiencing Matt's struggle with his inner self while trapped in the most common and mundane of modern inconveniences. I found it funny how he begged to be released from one prison only so he confine himself in another, for everyone else's good, of course. Following his lament as his humanity eroded away was enjoyable enough, but the flashback to the previous years episode was gruesomely exciting. It made the realization of just how dire the situation was. When he finally though solace was to be, he lost it, and watching the best literally shake off his last desperate grasp at humanity was just cool.

I also liked how this was pretty much self contained. Sure it very well could be expounded, but it really can stand on it's own. I've long had a problem trying to get my own short stories to a point of completion without having them feel like "My Story-The Abridged Version". I also liked, how in a fashion very similar to the other stories, when things got serious, there was some blood spilled. This story also had my favorite line of the entire contest, "But God avoided the Chicago area this time of year." That was just awesome. And the ending... unexpected, but made me chuckle. Got my vote.


Dead River
We had about a week to come up with stories. I was at a loss for a long while until that Friday brought a realization that I should play up the whole eerie local folklore angle. I grew up South Carolina, I was born en caul and my mother's family has a background in the Gullah culture to which many of them are still somewhat linked. I remember being young and barely understanding my great grandmother and even my grandmother at times, because they would speak in this weird offshoot of English that you didn't here anywhere else. It wasn't simply the lax "Ebonics" that people speak today, it was very much it's own language and culture.

I did have to do a bit of research on how to speak Gullah, but most of the names and places in my story are real. It was kinda easy getting material. I just had to put it together. I just spun some family history together with some local low country creepiness and tried my best to work out a story people could follow. It was originally going to be a twist on the "ghostly hitchhiker" theme, but the old haunted family house angle just worked out better and evolved more easily.

It's considerably shorter here than the final version, but all that's missing is a little characterization of the protagonist and his family's relationships. I was worried about the Gullah speak, but hoped context would push the comprehension for people who'd had no exposure to it previously. A couple of you stated that it was simple and uncomfortable to read. I wanted both of those to some extent, but I am worried that it was over simplistic. Was it appropriate or was it remedial?

At any rate, I really appreciate the props. Thank you.

 

[dbluesun]

Party of the Year
It's a shame more of the fam didn't find interest in this contest. This story is very relevant to the prevailing tone of the board in general. Who among us hasn't had to deal with their libido getting the into hot water. In poor Kevin's case, it cost him his life.

I tend to write dialogue driven short stories, and this one appealed that nature in me. I liked the exchanges as again, they were very relevant to the themes we usually encounter most here at BGOL. It was exciting watching Kevin fall ever deeper into Jenny's trap and his end, while expected, was executed in a shocking and visceral manner. I liked this story, and I'm sure it would have the most mass appeal within our community.


Sweet Streams
I was immediately impressed by the strength and weight of the narrative. I was reminded of the noir crime genre styles popularized in the early half of the 20th century. It was immediately obvious how completely devoid of passion this man's life had become. He'd grown technical and analytical, finding his purpose in the hunt. I wish I'd taken more of this tone in my Ark Knight story from the one the previous contests. This narrative styling is simply more conducive to conveying the bleak and bloody reality that a man who lives only to fight must endure.

There are so many levels of ideas that beg to be expounded upon in this story. The "classic" narrative, the vampire epidemic, the technological achievement, the lost love story; this would be a very long but very satisfying moving. It could be beautiful if done with the focus and care given to Blade Runner or other sci fi epics from decades past.


American Werewolf in Illinois
I had fun experiencing Matt's struggle with his inner self while trapped in the most common and mundane of modern inconveniences. I found it funny how he begged to be released from one prison only so he confine himself in another, for everyone else's good, of course. Following his lament as his humanity eroded away was enjoyable enough, but the flashback to the previous years episode was gruesomely exciting. It made the realization of just how dire the situation was. When he finally though solace was to be, he lost it, and watching the best literally shake off his last desperate grasp at humanity was just cool.

I also liked how this was pretty much self contained. Sure it very well could be expounded, but it really can stand on it's own. I've long had a problem trying to get my own short stories to a point of completion without having them feel like "My Story-The Abridged Version". I also liked, how in a fashion very similar to the other stories, when things got serious, there was some blood spilled. This story also had my favorite line of the entire contest, "But God avoided the Chicago area this time of year." That was just awesome. And the ending... unexpected, but made me chuckle. Got my vote.


Dead River
We had about a week to come up with stories. I was at a loss for a long while until that Friday brought a realization that I should play up the whole eerie local folklore angle. I grew up South Carolina, I was born en caul and my mother's family has a background in the Gullah culture to which many of them are still somewhat linked. I remember being young and barely understanding my great grandmother and even my grandmother at times, because they would speak in this weird offshoot of English that you didn't here anywhere else. It wasn't simply the lax "Ebonics" that people speak today, it was very much it's own language and culture.

I did have to do a bit of research on how to speak Gullah, but most of the names and places in my story are real. It was kinda easy. I just spun some family history together with some local low country creepiness and tried my best to work out a story people could follow.

It's considerably shorter here than the final version, but all that's missing is a little characterization of the protagonist and his family's relationships. I was worried about the Gullah speak, but hoped context would push the comprehension for people who'd had no exposure to it previously. A couple of you stated that it was simple and uncomfortable to read. I wanted both of those to some extent, but I am worried that it was over simplistic. Was it appropriate or was it remedial?

At any rate, I really appreciate the props. Thank you.

it wasn't remedial,it was simple in that it wasn't cluttered with stuff it didn't need,for example you didn't waste any space on explaining the folklore which added to the eerieness.

 

[Echelon]

Hey dbluesun, godofwine is correct. Participation and feedback is ALWAYS appreciated.

And everyone else, I'm working on something, but the functionality of the board seems to limit what I can do. Simply put, I want those who are enthusiastic about writing, whether it be actually creating works or simply reading them to be able to acknowledge or simply be aware of each other on the board. To that end, I give you:

(FEEL FREE TO USE IN YOUR SIGS):


(FEEL FREE TO USE IN YOUR AVATARS::


Of course there's nothing to loose by not having them. Just trying to start something. Anyway, back to the discussion!

 

[Echelon]

it wasn't remedial,it was simple in that it wasn't cluttered with stuff it didn't need,for example you didn't waste any space on explaining the folklore which added to the eerieness.

Gotcha. See, that's good to hear. Thank you.

 

[godofwine]

American Werewolf in Illinois
I had fun experiencing Matt's struggle with his inner self while trapped in the most common and mundane of modern inconveniences. I found it funny how he begged to be released from one prison only so he confine himself in another, for everyone else's good, of course. Following his lament as his humanity eroded away was enjoyable enough, but the flashback to the previous years episode was gruesomely exciting. It made the realization of just how dire the situation was. When he finally though solace was to be, he lost it, and watching the beast literally shake off his last desperate grasp at humanity was just cool.

I also liked how this was pretty much self contained. Sure it very well could be expounded, but it really can stand on it's own. I've long had a problem trying to get my own short stories to a point of completion without having them feel like "My Story-The Abridged Version". I also liked, how in a fashion very similar to the other stories, when things got serious, there was some blood spilled. This story also had my favorite line of the entire contest, "But God avoided the Chicago area this time of year." That was just awesome. And the ending... unexpected, but made me chuckle. Got my vote.

I am a movie nut. Always have been. My family are the same. We quote movies to fit situations. Anything from "What do you mean Willie's gone" from A Raisin in the Sun to a line from I'm Gonna Git U Sucka, Naked Gun, or the Shawshank Redemption. In fact, hardly a day goes by that some situation from some movie or TV show doesn't show its face and make me reference it. I crack myself up when no one else is around to get it. Self Entertainment.

Sadly, I cannot claim the line that you love in this story as my own. It reads like a slap in the face, doesn't it? A flushing of water down the toilet to spite the man dying of thirst. In my mind, too great to be wasted on a movie that I loved that many people never saw. (I borrowed the title of my book from a similar title of a book in a movie I once saw. I have to find the screenwriter and ask his permission when I finish the book. His story and mine are nowhere near alike in any way, but the title is beautiful. It's perfect. IMO, too beautiful, too perfect to waste on a fictional story in a movie - my way of paying homage. It is my belief that my love of movies has made me a better writer)

I altered it, so. But only to make it fit.

In The Count of Monte Cristo (2002 version), the warden Armond Dorleac of the Chateau d'If prepares to whip Edmund Dantes, and as he cried out for God's help the warden said:

Dorleac: "Now you’re thinking, just now ‘Why me, O God?’. The answer is, God has nothing to do with it. In fact, God is never in France this time of year."



I never meant to take it for my own and take credit. However, I do love good clever writing in a book or movie. BTW, The Count of Monte Cristo is a great movie, check it out.

 

[Echelon]

...I never meant to take it for my own and take credit. However, I do love good clever writing in a book or movie. BTW, The Count of Monte Cristo is a great movie, check it out.

All good. A little homage to the movie. It worked excellently though.


Hey fam, it's never too late to read and give feedback! Every constructive opinion is welcome.

Maybe we should do Christmas/ Winter Holiday stories next?

 

[Damian Stone]

in your story you could add little elements about the chick to make her creepier,,,like maybe she doesn't blink very often,the way dogs don't or slightly longer lower canine teeth,maybe fingers a little too long. i really thought she was gonna be feline...The forest part could have rustling or half seen shadows,maybe sniffing noises or things brushing up against ole' boy's leg. these things are just suggestions for if you consider making this a longer piece. Anyway i wish i could write like you guys,if ya'll ever want me to look at something just let me know.

Thanks, makes sense since there is no longer a 3000 word constraint..
I am just a beginner myself, just got to get to it man.

 

[Damian Stone]

Hey dbluesun, godofwine is correct. Participation and feedback is ALWAYS appreciated.

And everyone else, I'm working on something, but the functionality of the board seems to limit what I can do. Simply put, I want those who are enthusiastic about writing, whether it be actually creating works or simply reading them to be able to acknowledge or simply be aware of each other on the board. To that end, I give you:

(FEEL FREE TO USE IN YOUR SIGS):


(FEEL FREE TO USE IN YOUR AVATARS::


Of course there's nothing to loose by not having them. Just trying to start something. Anyway, back to the discussion!

Thanks Echelon will hook it up when I get home.

 

[godofwine]

All good. A little homage to the movie. It worked excellently though.


Hey fam, it's never too late to read and give feedback! Every constructive opinion is welcome.

Maybe we should do Christmas/ Winter Holiday stories next?

That's true to anyone reading this thread. It is never too late to drop by and say you liked, or didn't like a story. If you could say why you did or didn't that would be great, too.

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As far as another contest, man, whenever. It doesn't matter how many or how few people are involved. For the writers this is great practice. I have grown so much in between my first contest and the most recent one.

My friend, who is a HUGE critic when it comes to writing, said that the only thing that was wrong with mine was an over usage of commas, which I think is bullshit. If you don't have commas and everything just runs together and it is difficult to tell when one when to breathe and I believe also that it messes up the flow of the writing when you don't use commas.

What do you guys think? I noticed that Sweet Streams/Old Night lacked many commas and I thought that everything seemed to run together, but maybe that is how it is supposed to be or how the author wanted it. When I read it, I paused when I felt there should be a pause. My English teacher in high school said that if you pause when you read it then there should be punctuation of some kind there, but different teachers teach different ways.

Now, I write, so I believe I know how the writer meant for it to look/sound. However, when you have complete paragraphs with two periods and not a single comma in places where I believe that there should be commas I am left to wonder am I write or is my friend?

 

[godofwine]

Bump

 

[ansatsusha_gouki]

Send it to me and I'll post it in freetext host.

Bump

 

[Mr MajestiK]

That's true to anyone reading this thread. It is never too late to drop by and say you liked, or didn't like a story. If you could say why you did or didn't that would be great, too.

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As far as another contest, man, whenever. It doesn't matter how many or how few people are involved. For the writers this is great practice. I have grown so much in between my first contest and the most recent one.

My friend, who is a HUGE critic when it comes to writing, said that the only thing that was wrong with mine was an over usage of commas, which I think is bullshit. If you don't have commas and everything just runs together and it is difficult to tell when one when to breathe and I believe also that it messes up the flow of the writing when you don't use commas.

What do you guys think? I noticed that Sweet Streams/Old Night lacked many commas and I thought that everything seemed to run together, but maybe that is how it is supposed to be or how the author wanted it. When I read it, I paused when I felt there should be a pause. My English teacher in high school said that if you pause when you read it then there should be punctuation of some kind there, but different teachers teach different ways.

Now, I write, so I believe I know how the writer meant for it to look/sound. However, when you have complete paragraphs with two periods and not a single comma in places where I believe that there should be commas I am left to wonder am I write or is my friend?

The punctuation in Sweet Streams/Old Night was off because I wrote it in two hours and sent it off to you with a cursory proof read..

I aim to develop it further but merely wanted to give you guys a snapshot of what I'm capable of doing.

It's definitely still a work in progress.

I really appreciate Echelon's review as especially as regards the Blade Runner reference.

That definitely made my evening.

 

[godofwine]

The punctuation in Sweet Streams/Old Night was off because I wrote it in two hours and sent it off to you with a cursory proof read..

I aim to develop it further but merely wanted to give you guys a snapshot of what I'm capable of doing.

It's definitely still a work in progress.

I really appreciate Echelon's review as especially as regards the Blade Runner reference.

That definitely made my evening.

I really liked your story. Thanks for clearing up the punctuation thing. I did not know you wrote it in two hours, damn, amazing! I am pretty good at punctuation, but I admit I guess often. As my buddy said, I over use commas, and I admittedly do not know how to use semicolons and dashes.

You are definitely talented, and on a whole 'nother level. I thought your story was really well done. The interaction between the ex-wife and the protagonist was unbelievably accurate and believable, as was his hatred of vampires. It is something that you should consider making a full fledged novel as I am doing with The Ultimate Revenge, because there is so far you can go with it.

With your use of commas, or the lack thereof, I was taught differently, but according to my friend, you may be more correct than I. Your story contained what my teachers would consider run-on sentences (Mrs. Harvey was really strict on that as well as spelling, so I had to become as anal as she was to pass her class) and could have used more commas, but other than that it was flawless and in no way deserved 4th place IMO. With your story I actually had to try and find something wrong with it, and if that is the only negative critique then that is pretty damned good. If this is only a snapshot of your talent, I wonder what you could do with a dedicated couple of days or a week

I apologize for my lack of tact, though. I am not very good at critiquing, and though I know some things about writing, I am still an amateur.

As dbluesun said, unfortunately, Hollywood has run the Vampire genre into the ground. However, with this story built up as you have and the amazing talent you possess, this would make a great movie. Vampires taking over the Earth, a large contingent of people leave the planet to the monsters and weak followers to build a Terra-Base on Mars, only to have the monsters follow once they have run out of live bodies. An very original idea. I have seen Terra-bases formed because of people depleting the Earth of resources, but never for a situation that you built in Sweet Streams.

How did you come up with the idea? What was your motivation, the motivation for your characters?

 

[godofwine]

bump

 

[godofwine]

A Quick Exercise a friend of mine put me on to. Anybody can do this. Anybody who has written before, even if you think that you aren't that good. Like anything else, practice makes perfect.

A friend challenged me to write a 1 page story with a shooting at a restaurant just as the EMTs show up

No word limit. Just as much as you can fit on a MS Word page. Just post it here. I want to keep this writing thing going. No time limit, but if y'all can find a couple of hours and post it Monday, Tuesday, or Wednesday that'd be great.

 

[Echelon]

Damn! I'm with it. Give me a few.

 

[Echelon]

Okay. godofwine I hate you, man. Thanks for the practice though.

(Go easy on me, I'm still proofing, but hopefully it's readable.)

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[godofwine]

Okay. godofwine I hate you, man. Thanks for the practice though.

(Go easy on me, I'm still proofing, but hopefully it's readable.)

It's all cool. Practice helps. Exercises like this really help. You are a visual painter, whereas I am more of a narrator attempting to learn how to paint visually.

When I began your story I was like, "Uhh, did he just write a one page story without sticking to the topic?" And then it built, the drama, the fear when the lead character saw the brown leather duster...the falling leaf at the end

Good shit.

I have been sick as hel the past couple of days, 102 temperature, so no work for 2 days. Hell, when you are off work, it sucks that you feel so fucking miserable.

Anyway, here is mine. I don't know how you did yours exactly. I tried to embed mine as you did yours, but you'll have to school me on that.

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[Echelon]

Note to self, stay away from Mel's Diner. I like the gradual ascention into consciousness. Yours makes me want to play with my writing mechanics a bit, particularly sentence and paragraph length.

I'm journaling something now for the Fuck Stories board (because it's been a while) and I'm having trouble assembling the narrative because I have two protagonists. The subject matter along with the POV is making for a difficult time keeping things easy to follow. I think I'm using too many pronouns as well, but I still have much work to do with it. Translating a good memory to a good read is difficult.

Anyway. Your embed works just fine. The way I do it: When you enter the embed page, you'll see a link that says "Looking for the old embed page". If you click that, it'll give you a better look at the options for sizing, coloring and all that. I like the old page better than the new one. To me, it give me more finite control over the look of the embedded doc, but I've been using it for years, so I'm just more accustomed to the older style.

 

[godofwine]

Note to self, stay away from Mel's Diner. I like the gradual ascention into consciousness. Yours makes me want to play with my writing mechanics a bit, particularly sentence and paragraph length.

I'm journaling something now for the Fuck Stories board (because it's been a while) and I'm having trouble assembling the narrative because I have two protagonists. The subject matter along with the POV is making for a difficult time keeping things easy to follow. I think I'm using too many pronouns as well, but I still have much work to do with it. Translating a good memory to a good read is difficult.

Anyway. Your embed works just fine. The way I do it: When you enter the embed page, you'll see a link that says "Looking for the old embed page". If you click that, it'll give you a better look at the options for sizing, coloring and all that. I like the old page better than the new one. To me, it give me more finite control over the look of the embedded doc, but I've been using it for years, so I'm just more accustomed to the older style.

Maybe we could do some collab-bo something. I'm good with the narrator-style. I figure if you keep the narrator neutral instead of behind one or the other protagonist it would work. Maybe act as if there are two narrators. Is there an antagonist or just two pro's?

I got a good fuck story I wrote while bored at work. I'll post it tomorrow

 

[Echelon]

Maybe we could do some collab-bo something. I'm good with the narrator-style. I figure if you keep the narrator neutral instead of behind one or the other protagonist it would work. Maybe act as if there are two narrators. Is there an antagonist or just two pro's?

I got a good fuck story I wrote while bored at work. I'll post it tomorrow

I think the setting itself functions as the primary antagonist, introducing the all too familiar obstacles of daily life in that situation as thing play out. Keeping the narrator neutral is my primary issue, but I your 2 narrator recommendation gave me a great idea that I think I can work out with more success. I'll break into smaller chapters and shift the POV from one person to the other. I'll give me some room to flex some creativity plus give me the flexibility to get at both characters from the first person angle while the "antagonist" in all its forms remains distant. Yes.

 

[godofwine]

I think the setting itself functions as the primary antagonist, introducing the all too familiar obstacles of daily life in that situation as thing play out. Keeping the narrator neutral is my primary issue, but I your 2 narrator recommendation gave me a great idea that I think I can work out with more success. I'll break into smaller chapters and shift the POV from one person to the other. I'll give me some room to flex some creativity plus give me the flexibility to get at both characters from the first person angle while the "antagonist" in all its forms remains distant. Yes.

Sounds good. I gotta do some tweaking to my Girl from Cartegena before I post it

 

[ansatsusha_gouki]

bump

I finished with my story,just gotta figure out a way to type it up since I dont have a computer.

 

[godofwine]

bump

I finished with my story,just gotta figure out a way to type it up since I dont have a computer.

Just go to the library. If you can, find one that isn't that popular so they don't try to rush you off of the computer after 15-30 minutes.

 

[ansatsusha_gouki]

Finally,got a laptop will finish my second story sometime this weekend and then I will give both of them to GOW.....Its basically a remake of a story I did for school....Kinda wish I knew what I got on it....

 

[godofwine]

Finally,got a laptop will finish my second story sometime this weekend and then I will give both of them to GOW.....Its basically a remake of a story I did for school....Kinda wish I knew what I got on it....

Have you finished it, yet?

 

[Efil4Zaggin]

Props to the writers. You all have a gift.

 

[godofwine]

Props to the writers. You all have a gift.

THanks for taking the time to show the love. It is hard for a writer to gauge how well or how poor he/she writes and what they need to improve on. It is only when other writers AND people with skills to critique that we improve.

 

[ansatsusha_gouki]

I know I keep saying this but,I will have my stories soon....I've been trying to find me a job and working on my drawing...


I worked out a schedule so I wont neglect my writing...Hopefully I will get my short stories out in the middle of March or before that...but I will have them out...

 

[godofwine]

I know I keep saying this but,I will have my stories soon....I've been trying to find me a job and working on my drawing...


I worked out a schedule so I wont neglect my writing...Hopefully I will get my short stories out in the middle of March or before that...but I will have them out...

I need to read everyone's short story since I didnt get a chance too .....

You have to work out a time to do it. Life get busy and time slips away like water through your fingers, before you know it the ice sculpture you always meant to carve is now a puddle on the floor.

It is sad of the other stories on available anymore. The Contest the maelstrom started Arent viewable now, sadly.

 

[djkidrich]

 

[godofwine]

Echelon, I ain't forgot about you, man. I gotta contact a mod or HNIC and see about how to donate a year to someone.

Great story, bro. Even the short one.

 

[godofwine]

Damn, I was reading Dead River again at work and reading up on caulborn babies and the gullah folks. Damn. That is some good shit right there. The research was just wow.

 

[Echelon]

Ha! I thought that was already done. No worries, though. The contest was fun, and I'll give you props again for hosting it because I'll be dammed if I'm that patient .

At any rate, thank you. Dead River was fun mostly because of the challenge of meeting the requisite limits of the contest and the little bit of self exploration I had to do in the process. The thing I'm finally moving ahead with for the story board is going to be a beast though. It'll be the first erotic thing I've done here in a couple of years and I hope my skill has progressed to such a point where I truly relay the scale and emotion of the events. Hopefully, everything I've ever shared here will pale in comparison to "Long Hours" when I'm done. Time though, she works against me. When its done, its done, right?

 

[godofwine]

Ha! I thought that was already done. No worries, though. The contest was fun, and I'll give you props again for hosting it because I'll be dammed if I'm that patient .

At any rate, thank you. Dead River was fun mostly because of the challenge of meeting the requisite limits of the contest and the little bit of self exploration I had to do in the process. The thing I'm finally moving ahead with for the story board is going to be a beast though. It'll be the first erotic thing I've done here in a couple of years and I hope my skill has progressed to such a point where I truly relay the scale and emotion of the events. Hopefully, everything I've ever shared here will pale in comparison to "Long Hours" when I'm done. Time though, she works against me. When its done, its done, right?

I'm ready to host another one, but I will likely wait until spring break for me (after Wednesday's class I am off for 13 days).

As for the erotic stories, I wrote one about a fine ass female I met in Cartegena Columbia in 1999. Damn she was fine. I wish I could find a picture.

I haven't written outside of classwork since maybe July, I had a tough year, but I need to get back into it with the character development and all. Naming characters, likes, dislikes, favorite colors, foods, attitudes, fears, personality traits - even shit that isn't going to make the novel. My story from the second contest "The Ultimate Revenge" is turning out to be a great project. Time is a beast, though. It doesn't play fair and it doesn't wait for anyone or anything.